Dofus Story from the King

Alright bums it's King here. Couldn't remember my pass so i made another account XD Anyway I've been working on this Dofus Story and I have chapter 1 done so check it out whenever you can

http://pcstampede.deviantart.com/art/Dofus-Story-Chapter-1-102481590

Tim said you had to have a deviant account to download it as it is a pdf file. If you cant get it and want just hit me up on msn and ill send you the Word or Pdf version.

For lazy guys like me who don't want to be deviant member, you can download .pdf there :

Chapter 1 Dofus.pdf

Well i finally read it ^^

Sorry to have been long, but i'm french -_-'

So... what I think about this story :

Well, the way you use to tell the story (talking about "players", listing all gears, quoting spells name, ...) is weird and i had some difficulties to get used to the story, but passed this first impression (after all, it was a wanted style), the story starts pretty well.

Fight is maybe too long... it's a serie of spells and i was fastly lost... but maybe it's because i'm french

Anyway, I wait the 2nd chapter

I agree with ell, but for me its becouse im croatian.

I didnt read the name "SpaceCom" anywhere? So somehting is wrong with the story.Good story though even for those who have DnD paper and pencil background.

He toled me some ppl will come later. ^^

I knew someone *points at Spaceman* would say something about not being in it XD lol Don't worry Spaceman I already had plans for you in the story its just not here yet. Chapter 2 will be up soon.

I don't really want to reveal you the end but... well... you die space ...

Please... understand... it's to add some drama.. all that...

PS : btw King, if you want to get back your old account... just ask me... you know I can... -.-

Ellyos I need you to upload Chapter 2 for me. Log on msn whenever you can.

Okay the Chapter 2 is online.

You can get it there :
Chapter 2 Dofus

Now my impress about this chapter :

Better than first part... Fight is more interesting but maybe it's because there are more fighters in it. Anyway, it can certainly be shorted a little.

Too much "X said"... especioully disturbing when the 4 sadidettes talk in a row. Some synonyms can give more sense to the dialog. Just check some novels to find some help.

Else, the chapter has an end I pretty like

I wait the chapter 3

arfffffff.
When the four sadidettes where out of the bushes I was looking forward something like this : “I’m Ruby.”
“I’m Sapphira.”
“I’m Emeralda.”
“I’m Diamondine.” "
Now with your powers combined I'm Captain Planet!"
*song*
Captain planet he is a hero .... na nanananna....

haha space, you own

Lol space. I was gonna make it more of a disco thing but last minute change Anyway rejoice some of you make debut in chap 3. Look forward to it

Btw where can I post stories that aren't dofus related Ellyos?

I can host them if you want, just create new post and send me your stories.

By the way, I don't know if you gave links of the first chapters on another forum or anywhere else, but i changed the url, so update them in case.

Chapter 3: Clan Wars is complete. Been busy so it came slower then the others. Host it for me when you can Ellyos.

>Here is the file : Dofus Chapter 3

Is there something wrong with chapter 3 or it is just for me? I get it in excel and no text there.

Weird...

Try in going there :
http://www.guildseks.com/Dofus/Includes/Downloads/KingSadida/DofusStory

ah i get it, its becouse of pdf file and i dont have adobe and someone set that pdf file is opened by excel

If you need the doc version just let me know Tim.

Fucking mummification spell in moowolf fight yeah bitches ^___^ playful claw in line of Boos ekekekekekekekekkeekekbest chapter ever ^^. And stupid emo eni always to late pfffff

Chapter 4 is ready when you are Ellyos. I didn't expect it to come along so fast

Here is the chapter 4 !

It's christmas time so things have been slow but I've started chapter 5 so it should be done soon.