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pcstampede23 Servant
Number of posts : 18 Registration date : 2008-11-02
| Subject: Dofus Story from the King Sun 2 Nov - 14:55 | |
| Alright bums it's King here. Couldn't remember my pass so i made another account XD Anyway I've been working on this Dofus Story and I have chapter 1 done so check it out whenever you can http://pcstampede.deviantart.com/art/Dofus-Story-Chapter-1-102481590 Tim said you had to have a deviant account to download it as it is a pdf file. If you cant get it and want just hit me up on msn and ill send you the Word or Pdf version. | |
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Ellyos Leader
Number of posts : 374 Registration date : 2006-05-15
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Sun 2 Nov - 15:22 | |
| For lazy guys like me who don't want to be deviant member, you can download .pdf there :
Chapter 1 Dofus.pdf
Last edited by Ellyos on Wed 19 Nov - 13:24; edited 1 time in total | |
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Ellyos Leader
Number of posts : 374 Registration date : 2006-05-15
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Sun 2 Nov - 15:52 | |
| Well i finally read it ^^ Sorry to have been long, but i'm french -_-' So... what I think about this story : Well, the way you use to tell the story (talking about "players", listing all gears, quoting spells name, ...) is weird and i had some difficulties to get used to the story, but passed this first impression (after all, it was a wanted style), the story starts pretty well. Fight is maybe too long... it's a serie of spells and i was fastly lost... but maybe it's because i'm french Anyway, I wait the 2nd chapter | |
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Timesi Counsellor
Number of posts : 57 Localisation : Croatia Registration date : 2006-05-17
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Mon 3 Nov - 9:38 | |
| I agree with ell, but for me its becouse im croatian. | |
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SpaceCom Governor
Number of posts : 157 Age : 40 Localisation : Je suis un mechant Grec Registration date : 2006-05-16
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Wed 5 Nov - 4:17 | |
| I didnt read the name "SpaceCom" anywhere? So somehting is wrong with the story.Good story though even for those who have DnD paper and pencil background. | |
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Timesi Counsellor
Number of posts : 57 Localisation : Croatia Registration date : 2006-05-17
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Wed 5 Nov - 11:18 | |
| He toled me some ppl will come later. ^^ | |
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pcstampede23 Servant
Number of posts : 18 Registration date : 2008-11-02
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Tue 11 Nov - 17:01 | |
| I knew someone *points at Spaceman* would say something about not being in it XD lol Don't worry Spaceman I already had plans for you in the story its just not here yet. Chapter 2 will be up soon. | |
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Ellyos Leader
Number of posts : 374 Registration date : 2006-05-15
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Wed 12 Nov - 2:38 | |
| I don't really want to reveal you the end but... well... you die space ...
Please... understand... it's to add some drama.. all that...
PS : btw King, if you want to get back your old account... just ask me... you know I can... -.- | |
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pcstampede23 Servant
Number of posts : 18 Registration date : 2008-11-02
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Wed 12 Nov - 7:56 | |
| Ellyos I need you to upload Chapter 2 for me. Log on msn whenever you can. | |
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Ellyos Leader
Number of posts : 374 Registration date : 2006-05-15
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Wed 12 Nov - 11:50 | |
| Okay the Chapter 2 is online. You can get it there : Chapter 2 Dofus Now my impress about this chapter : Better than first part... Fight is more interesting but maybe it's because there are more fighters in it. Anyway, it can certainly be shorted a little. Too much "X said"... especioully disturbing when the 4 sadidettes talk in a row. Some synonyms can give more sense to the dialog. Just check some novels to find some help. Else, the chapter has an end I pretty like I wait the chapter 3
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SpaceCom Governor
Number of posts : 157 Age : 40 Localisation : Je suis un mechant Grec Registration date : 2006-05-16
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Fri 14 Nov - 3:13 | |
| arfffffff. When the four sadidettes where out of the bushes I was looking forward something like this : “I’m Ruby.” “I’m Sapphira.” “I’m Emeralda.” “I’m Diamondine.” " Now with your powers combined I'm Captain Planet!" *song* Captain planet he is a hero .... na nanananna.... | |
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Timesi Counsellor
Number of posts : 57 Localisation : Croatia Registration date : 2006-05-17
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Fri 14 Nov - 6:07 | |
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pcstampede23 Servant
Number of posts : 18 Registration date : 2008-11-02
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Fri 14 Nov - 8:22 | |
| Lol space. I was gonna make it more of a disco thing but last minute change Anyway rejoice some of you make debut in chap 3. Look forward to it | |
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pcstampede23 Servant
Number of posts : 18 Registration date : 2008-11-02
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Tue 18 Nov - 18:23 | |
| Btw where can I post stories that aren't dofus related Ellyos? | |
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Ellyos Leader
Number of posts : 374 Registration date : 2006-05-15
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Wed 19 Nov - 13:22 | |
| I can host them if you want, just create new post and send me your stories.
By the way, I don't know if you gave links of the first chapters on another forum or anywhere else, but i changed the url, so update them in case. | |
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pcstampede23 Servant
Number of posts : 18 Registration date : 2008-11-02
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Sun 23 Nov - 20:55 | |
| Chapter 3: Clan Wars is complete. Been busy so it came slower then the others. Host it for me when you can Ellyos. | |
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Ellyos Leader
Number of posts : 374 Registration date : 2006-05-15
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Mon 24 Nov - 11:26 | |
| >Here is the file : Dofus Chapter 3 | |
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Timesi Counsellor
Number of posts : 57 Localisation : Croatia Registration date : 2006-05-17
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Mon 24 Nov - 11:42 | |
| Is there something wrong with chapter 3 or it is just for me? I get it in excel and no text there. | |
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Ellyos Leader
Number of posts : 374 Registration date : 2006-05-15
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Mon 24 Nov - 14:22 | |
| Weird...
Try in going there : http://www.guildseks.com/Dofus/Includes/Downloads/KingSadida/DofusStory | |
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Timesi Counsellor
Number of posts : 57 Localisation : Croatia Registration date : 2006-05-17
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pcstampede23 Servant
Number of posts : 18 Registration date : 2008-11-02
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Tue 25 Nov - 6:09 | |
| If you need the doc version just let me know Tim. | |
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SpaceCom Governor
Number of posts : 157 Age : 40 Localisation : Je suis un mechant Grec Registration date : 2006-05-16
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Thu 27 Nov - 4:52 | |
| Fucking mummification spell in moowolf fight yeah bitches ^___^ playful claw in line of Boos ekekekekekekekekkeekekbest chapter ever ^^. And stupid emo eni always to late pfffff | |
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pcstampede23 Servant
Number of posts : 18 Registration date : 2008-11-02
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Fri 28 Nov - 10:02 | |
| Chapter 4 is ready when you are Ellyos. I didn't expect it to come along so fast | |
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Ellyos Leader
Number of posts : 374 Registration date : 2006-05-15
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Sat 29 Nov - 4:16 | |
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pcstampede23 Servant
Number of posts : 18 Registration date : 2008-11-02
| Subject: Re: Dofus Story from the King Thu 18 Dec - 15:37 | |
| It's christmas time so things have been slow but I've started chapter 5 so it should be done soon. | |
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